Concrete
as English or probably any other language, aggregate of geography and experience, rock and sand eroded, made new, built up, solved, dis- solved, solved again by variable...Read More
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I don’t find the opening very interesting. It reads like a white paper or something technical – which I would really dig if you where using that as a pivot into a really odd / original / startling...
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Thanks for the read and the comments, Tree. No, I wasn't "aiming for something profound." In fact, I seldom aim for anything when writing. I'd say it's more a musing on language, with concrete,...
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A linguist/dialectic ploy on Island Syndrome which simply goes too far I reckon, SB here's the poem: 1. Concrete as English or probably any other language, aggregate of geography and experience, rock...
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Thanks for reading, Billy and Jasperella. Billy, maybe somewhere in my mind I'm aiming, but I'm not aware that's the case. I subscribe to Kant's purposive without purpose explanation. Jasperella, I...
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I am wondering about the couplet construction and whether that helps your poem or not. I would be tempted to follow a certain meter for the lines in the format you chose. It might enhance the beauty....
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Michael, thanks for reading. I'm always suspicious of regular forms, so I wondered about the couplets, too, but I think they're in keeping with the concrete, which is malleable until it sets in its...
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what I like about this is the same as what I am uncertain of, at first. In the end, I like the building up, in such mentalizing ways... as if to make a statement of a 'watcher' who adds up joys, adds...
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Steve said, "the poem came from what I know about language and what I know from a previous life about concrete and bridge construction." Yup, I could see that clearly -- a sort of "time and materials"...
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Thanks for your comments, Osal. Willowdown, I have no idea what you're talking about, but thanks for dropping by. Thanks, Toni. I'll take a look at that river section again. It seemed a necessary...
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much enjoyed, Steven I personally like the "water" lines- kind of expands the image for me before it is narrowed back in to a more concrete finish. The simplicity of those lines are fluid for this...
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enjoyed this... a lot of wisdom here...also liked the form of it....well chosen
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